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Directions 6

Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the two pictures,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. point out the consequences for this phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题：

在写作中，审题这个环节是非常重要的。在图画作文中，我们不仅要仔细审视图画，而且还应将英文的提纲看清楚。这篇文章配了双图，双图多是表示对比关系，这里是凸显时间的先后。提纲包括三个部分：描写图画、阐释含义和指出后果，这就决定了我们文章的结构走向。

Sample:

Two pictures above describe a story which we would never wish to encounter. In the first one, a large crowd gathered around a man lying on the ground. One person said, “He seems to be drunk.” Another whispered, “His head and hands seem to be bleeding.” In the second picture, a policeman is asking those who were present, “Why didn’t send him to hospital?” The first one said, “I was hurrying to work.” The second one said, “I was hurrying to school.”

It is quite obvious that the drawer wishes to draw our attention to this most unfavorable social phenomenon. Many people are used to finding all kinds of excuses to shirk their responsibilities of helping those who are in need of help. In their eyes, their own daily businesses are always more important than those of the strangers, even their lives. 

This phenomenon will bring a series of harmful consequences. First, when people refuse to take care of the strangers, the danger of accidents will be much higher, because you have only a small group of people to rely on whenever emergency arises. Everyone may come across accidents from time to time, and mutual help will prevent most of them from being destructive. Second, the possibility of attaining a happy life will be much smaller. If everyone only takes his own interests into consideration in face of big events, the society will be full of selfish people. The social cost of achieving success will remain high before cooperation becomes a habit.

If any one of us wants to enjoy a happy and secure life, we have to be prepared to extend our helping hands to others including strangers, for helping others is equal to helping ourselves.  

点评：

这篇文章最终写成了四段，结构非常清晰。第一段分别描写了两副图画，语言简洁流畅。注意这一段不宜过长。
第二段是测度作者的意图，共三句话，第一句是一个经典句型：It is quite obvious that the drawer wishes to draw our attention to... 这句话直指图画所揭示的社会现象，后面两句来具体说明：先说许多人千方百计找理由以逃避帮助他人；然后解释原因，他们认为……注意段中句子之间的逻辑关系，这是非常重要的。
第三段写了该现象引起的有害的后果，该段的首句是个经典的模板句，后分两点来说明。第一点说明当人们不愿意帮助他人时，事故所造成的危险就会大得多，因为那样的话每个人能依靠的人（即亲人和朋友）是非常有限的。这一点的第二句话是个难句，展现了很强的句子内部的逻辑，希望大家用心学习。这句话的意思是：每个人都会遇到事故，而相互帮助可以避免大部分的事故造成毁灭性的后果。到这里，我们可以看出，思想是由语言表达的，要想深刻地表达思想，一定要多模仿、多操练。第二点是从更广阔的角度去考虑问题，说明获得幸福生活的可能性减小了。社会充满了自私的人们，获得成功的社会成本陡增。
末段是结语——如果我们想要享受幸福的生活，我们应向他人（包括陌生人）伸出援手。
第二段的第二句中的shirk one?s responsibility表示“逃避责任”。第三段第二句的emergency表示“紧急情况”。第三句的destructive表示“造成重大损害的”。第五句的in face of表示“面临”。最后一句的cooperation becomes a habit表示“合作成为一种习惯”。

心得：

1．文章的结构层次一定要清楚，这是充分理解提纲与图画构成语境的结果。
2．学习写作主从复合句，充分理解句子内部的逻辑关系。通过本文，重点学习条件状语从句。
典型的条件状语从句：If everyone only takes his own interests into consideration in face of big events, the society will be full of selfish people.
嵌套原因状语从句的条件状语从句：If any one of us wants to enjoy a happy and secure life, we have to be prepared to extend our helping hands to others including strangers, for helping others is equal to helping ourselves.

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