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Directions1

Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the two pictures,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. point out the reasons for such phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题：

这道题包含两幅对比鲜明的图画，指令要求在描述图画后阐明含义并给出该现象的原因。我们应该这样来构造全文：第一段描述图画；第二段发表自己对图画的看法；第三段给出该现象的原因；第四段下结论，简要提出解决问题的办法。经过学习之后，大家就会知道这是一个极为重要的模式，请大家用心掌握。

Sample:

As is depicted by the two pictures, a sharp contrast is shaped between the parents and the son. In the left drawing, the parents are working hard in the field, bending over and sweating heavily. Near them is a basket with very simple food in it. However, in the right drawing, their son is squandering the money on luxurious food and chatting on mobile phone.

How pitiful the parents are! They spare no efforts to earn money in order to support their son’s study and life in university. They seem to be willing to do everything that is helpful to their beloved son. But, in return, the son spends the money as he likes without knowing how hard his parents work for it and how he should use it to better prepare himself for future career.

In my opinion, the reasons for this phenomenon come down to one essential point—failure of both family and school education. For one thing, quite a lot of Chinese parents spoil their children. All parents’ love for children is the same, but different is the way of showing it. Many parents hope too much that their children will have a bright future, which, in their eyes, means key universities, hot majors, good salaries and so on. So they try their best to satisfy the children’s demands instead of teaching them to struggle for future with their own hands. For another, centered on exam marks, the school education also fails, to a large extent, to impart moral standards to the children, especially the conception of self?reliance and hard struggle.

In a word, to change the phenomenon described by the above pictures, a reform in our current education system is not only necessary but urgent.

点评：

第一段的重点是在描述时突出两幅图画之间强烈的反差，所以这里专门加上了第一句话。这一段在用词上也很考究。第二段强烈地表达了自己的感想。首句使用了感叹句。而后先说父母竭尽全力挣钱供孩子读书，后说孩子不知父母辛苦，不懂得如何正确利用父母的血汗钱。第三段给出了该现象的原因——家庭和学校教育的失败，而后分为两方面来说，结构极为清晰。最后一段只有一句话，掷地有声——要想改变现状，只能改革当前的教育体系。

心得：

全文一气呵成，读来倍感畅快。从描述图画，到发表评论，到给出原因，再到解决办法，可谓浑然一体。既有全局的考虑，又有细微处语言的运用，该文值得大家细细品味。

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