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　　在托福写作的考试中，我们会遇到一些陷阱，那么我们该如何避开呢?本文为大家带来一波福利教考生如何避开托福写作考试中的陷阱，希望对大家获得托福写作高分有所帮助。大家可以参考一下，在备考中多多注意细节，从细节入手，提高写作质量，攻克托福写作

　　如何避开托福写作中的陷阱?

　　1.用词不当

　　学生们写的托福写作里或多或少都会有一些用词不当的问题，但是要注意的是一些基本的错误是不能犯的。

　　In the show, if participators answer twenty problems that the host mentioned correctly, they will get five hundreds thousand U.S. dollars as a prize.

　　——problems应改为questions

　　2.拼写错误

　　这里的拼写错误不是指在考试时候的误打，而是托福考试考生对词汇拼写记忆的错误。

　　In conclusion, issue of whether parents are the best teachers is a complex one, requiring subjective judgement, consequently, there are no easy or certain answers.

　　——judgement应改为judgment

　　3.乱用大词

　　First of all, children can earn money from their jobs, although there isn’t too much, but they will keep their salary gingerliness.

　　这里的gingerliness根本是不知所云。该句子还有以下问题：

　　1)该作文题目是讲学生是否应该做兼职，因此children的出现就显得很莫名其妙;

　　2)although和but是不能连用的;

　　3)指代不明，they不知道是指代前面的什么;

　　4.表达中式

　　The second argument-it might have been noticed by others-is that in some occasion, it is quite difficult to compare parents to teachers because parents are a kind of people, teachers are a kind of vocation.

　　句子中划线部分的表达过于中式化。

　　5.表意重复

　　They shocked their friends, devastated their families, crushed their best friends.

　　前面已经提到了朋友，后面又提到朋友。

　　The show is so compelling but attractive.

　　compelling和attractive是同义词，所以这里这么写就让人不明白。

　　6.固定用法错误

　　To some extends, I agree with the author’s general assertion that if parents also have a comprehensive sense of professional knowledge.

　　——To some extends应改为To some extent

　　7.例证夸张

　　For example, when a doctor faces a patient who has got cancer, the doctor cannot tell the truth, for the truth may cause the patient’s immediate death.

　　虽然善意的谎言是必要的，但是其功效显然没有这么大。

　　托福写作高分范文——Suburbanization

　　在托福的备考过程中，想拿到高分非常不容易。特别是托福写作就更非易事，那么研究一两篇优秀范文，可以让我们了解新托福写作的高分要素。下面就为大家推荐几篇精彩的托福备考范文，希望能为大家的托福备考带来帮助。

　　范文的题目： Suburbanization

　　If by "suburb" is meant an urban margin that grows more rapidly than its already developed interior, the process of suburbanization began during the emergence of the industrial city in the second quarter of the nineteenth century. Before that period the city was a small highly compact cluster in which people moved about on foot and goods were conveyed by horse and cart. But the early factories built in the 1840’s were located along waterways and near railheads at the edges of cities, and housing was needed for the thousands of people drawn by the prospect of employment. In time, the factories were surrounded by proliferating mill towns of apartments and row houses that abutted the older, main cities. As a defense against this encroachment and to enlarge their tax bases, the cities appropriated their industrial neighbors. In 1854, for example, the city of Philadelphia annexed most of Philadelphia County. Similar municipal maneuvers took place in Chicago and in New York. Indeed, most great cities of the United States achieved such status only by incorporating the communities along their borders.

　　With the acceleration of industrial growth came acute urban crowding and accompanying social stress-conditions that began to approach disastrous proportions when, in 1888, the first commercially successful electric traction line was developed. Within a few years the horse-drawn trolleys were retired and electric streetcar networks crisscrossed and connected every major urban area, fostering a wave of suburbanization that transformed the compact industrial city into a dispersed metropolis. This first phase of mass-scale suburbanization was reinforced by the simultaneous emergence of the urban Middle Class, whose desires for homeownership in neighborhoods far from the aging inner city were satisfied by the developers of single-family housing tracts.

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